MRUs with Randy Ingermanson

Randy Ingermanson's teaching on MRUs this week on his blog, and has been critiquing sections posted by his blog readers. This Thursday mine was up:

Katie's MRUs

After the critique, I made some changes and posted the edited version in the comments. To my surprise, he critiqued the edited version as well. His verdict? Well, you'll have to stop by the site to see:

Katie's Revisions

There's also some discussion over my use of the word "stabbed" in the edited version. I think it's a unique way of Tahir perceiving even Karel's actions as an attack, yet some can't visualize the motion. Your thoughts?